Flame/Candle
So Day One of WoPoWriMo – here is my first effort, it is unedited and raw so feed back would be good 🙂
It has been inspired from the writing exercise on the WoPo website.
Flame/Candle
Flaring gutter
Dancing shadows
In waxen pools
Clear Warmth
Consumed
Dying in reaction
Sucked from the centre
Drained into dancing light
Smokey tendrils
A heat shimmer soul
Fragile consuming flame
In living
Time grows short
Smooth yellowed white
Pillar
Soft at the edges
Like bone
Posted: Monday, February 1st, 2010 @ 10:53 pm
Categories: WoPoWriMo.
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February 2nd, 2010 at 4:14 pm
I like it. My one thought is at the line “In Living” – are you comparing the candle flame to living?
February 2nd, 2010 at 4:30 pm
Yes that was the idea – in that we age as we live and the candle grows smaller as it burns, leading both on to the inevitable end.
thanks 🙂
February 3rd, 2010 at 12:13 am
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